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    “BLOOMING DALES” – AN INDULGENCE


    No matter what they say,
    To utter thwart my day;
    No wonder what I do,
    To canter past that woe.


    A fond touch of yours is
    A candle my heart flies to;
    A gentle word of yours is
    A jingle my senses heed to.


    Not too far was the desert of hatred,
    Hot too for my lonesome soul to sweat.
    Arms of yours were around, I dreamt;
    Qualms of mine were asleep, I doubt.


    Silent were those nights, yet,
    Sonorous with your whispers;
    Serene were those sights, but,
    Amorous with your whimsies.


    Might joy rained overnight, for
    Blooming dales to delight the dawn.
    Crooning gales encore the lawn to
    Light the nights with warmth and cloy.


    No matter what they say,
    It’s all ill about you.
    No wonder what I do,
    It’s all in praise of you.
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    entamachee......
    English-ilum vannallo...
    Kelly okke odithallum...

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    Quote Originally Posted by maryland View Post
    entamachee......
    English-ilum vannallo...
    Kelly okke odithallum...
    Thanks for the comments.....

    Bhaaviyil oru Keats aayaalo?

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    Quote Originally Posted by binz View Post
    Thanks for the comments.....

    Bhaaviyil oru Keats aayaalo?
    detailed review varunnundu...

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    Kollaalo .... Chila line okke sarikkum haunting aanallo ... ?
    A fondle touch of yours is
    A candle my heart flies to; ....
    When truth is a fantasy, reality lies ..
    Na
    rayana ..
    . Narayana ...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Naradhan View Post
    Kollaalo .... Chila line okke sarikkum haunting aanallo ... ?
    A fondle touch of yours is
    A candle my heart flies to; ....
    Sathyathil oru pareekshanam nadathiyathaa...

    English il ezhuthi nokki enneyuulloooo...Just an attempt...

    Thank you so much for reading ...and for the comments too.....

    Please do suggest if anything to improve.

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    Quote Originally Posted by maryland View Post
    detailed review varunnundu...
    Really happy to kow that..........Thanks a lot......

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    Quote Originally Posted by binz View Post
    Sathyathil oru pareekshanam nadathiyathaa...

    English il ezhuthi nokki enneyuulloooo...Just an attempt...

    Thank you so much for reading ...and for the comments too.....

    Please do suggest if anything to improve.
    Okay ...


    "A fondle touch of yours is" change to "A fond touch of yours is"
    "Amorous with your whimsey(whimsy)" change to "Amorous with your whimsies"
    "It’s all ill about you." revise it ....
    When truth is a fantasy, reality lies ..
    Na
    rayana ..
    . Narayana ...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Naradhan View Post
    Okay ...


    "A fondle touch of yours is" change to "A fond touch of yours is"
    "Amorous with your whimsey(whimsy)" change to "Amorous with your whimsies"
    "It’s all ill about you." revise it ....
    ambada veeraaa

    binz poem nannayittunde keep writing..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Naradhan View Post
    Okay ...


    "A fondle touch of yours is" change to "A fond touch of yours is"
    "Amorous with your whimsey(whimsy)" change to "Amorous with your whimsies"
    "It’s all ill about you." revise it ....
    Thanks for the suggestions...Done

    "It’s all ill about you." revise it .... No idea on how to make a change....

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